WALT write a descriptive piece of writing from the old mans point of view as he recalls his memories .
Hello I am playing my very old piano in 2017 24 of September and I am in a very dark room and I remembering my family I am very sad because some of my family has died and I want to remember my family that has died the first person that I thought of was my wife then my first teardrop came out of my blue eyes and then another teardrop came out of my eye again so then more cept coming and then I thought of something and this one was about the world war one of my brothers went to war so did I it was not fun went at October 2018 I said to my please don’t died he was going to go by himself but then someone poshed me on the buot
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Friday, 22 September 2017
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Hey Rocky-James,
ReplyDeleteHappy New Year! I am Jade C from the Summer Learning Journey blogging team 2017-2018. I will be blogging with you this summer! I hope you are having a wonderful time with your friends and your family!
Rocky-James, your name is super cool! I really liked your imaginative writing, it makes me wonder what my life would look like when I am really old. Would I have kids? Would I have my own house? It was really sad to read the part where the old man was missing his dead wife. I think you are a great writer because you made me feel like I was the main character. I hope to read more of your blog and comment on them.
To help you get started with blogging this summer, I have included the link to our Summer Learning Journey activities list.
https://sites.google.com/site/summerlearningjourney/weekly-activities
Let's go on the Summer Learning Journey together!
All the best,
Jade C.